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Description that doesn’t work
"He was cloaked and his face veiled so deep in shadow that it could not be seen, but the firelight caught his eyes." Problems: 1. If someone is "cloaked" it is a general indication they are "hidden" inside the garment, meaning, they are wearing the hood as well as the cloak. No need to further describe how deeply hidden the cloak makes the character, or that the hood is up, or that the hood is also a cowl. 2. It's extremely difficult to have a hood so deep that a person's face is completely hidden by shadow, yet they are still able to move about, notice the scenery and participate in any action other than staring at the ground. Let alone then be able to see firelight in their eyes. Don't believe me? Try it.
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Assassins’ Canon is now available from Utility Fog Press. You’ll find tales of the dark and deadly kind, including my own story, “Vendetta.”Here is a description of the anthology:
“Few images evoke a more powerful or frightening reaction than that of the assassin. Silently creeping into your room while you sleep, they plunge a pick deep inside your brain, or fill your snoring nostrils with poisonous vapour. Or perhaps skilled fingers from the shadows strike a vital point during mid-step; the coroners say it was a heart attack. Assassins are people to be feared, no doubt. But what do they fear? What do they dream of? What life, what world, are they longing to achieve with their actions? Is the killing just a job or is there some deeper motivation that drives them? And what happens when it all goes wrong?
In Assassins’ Canon a full gamut of would-be killers is explored: gangsters, henchmen, soldiers, newly-weds, the reluctant, the willing, the skilled, and the novice. And, for better or worse, all must bear the consequences of their choices.”
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© 2009 Suzzanne Myers.
Sunday, November 29, 2009
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